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T  i  cks

     are a consistent bed partner
not to be confused with the humming of ceiling fans
or the thrumming of cardiologist fascination

          not to be mistaken for
   

the soft exhalation
       of company
                             in tangled threads or pallid flesh;

certainly they are similar
       and quiet audible reactions
       can drown within each other
but
                                 if you listen
            very carefully
there is no mistaking
            the clocks subtle lulling:

     "   One
                    less,

            One              
   le ss...

   ..."
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010   Writer
wow, very interesting and powerful
good work :)
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Kalimey Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Great Poem Sir ! I love how paced it is; the flow when reading it is like an allegory for your word's meaning.
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that70show4 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2010
Very nice; I've always liked your work
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Forbsie Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
fantastic piece
can't say i've thought about the ticking of a clock like that before
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